Sharon was thinking about the cute new boy in her math class as she walked to school with Julie. She wondered whether Julie thought he was cute or not. If Julie was interested, Sharon didn’t stand a chance.
“So what do you think of Barney?” Sharon asked. “The new kid in Math.”
“Are you talking about the kid who—”
Before Julie could finish her sentence, a car screeched around the corner and smashed into a fire hydrant not fifteen feet from where the girls stood.
Water sprayed up like a geyser.
A man crawled out of the driver’s seat, getting soaked in the process.
“You know,” Sharon said, steering Julie away from the water. “Barney. The kid who just moved here from California. What do you think of him?”
Let Go of the AgendaSpeaking, one time about characters reacting in unrealistic ways, freelance editor Rebecca LuElla Miller said:
Never let a character act or speak just to convey information to the audience. They always have to act according to their own personalities. Ask yourself, “What would she say next?” rather than asking, “What does the reader need to know now?”