Novel Rocket: Foreshadowing

Saturday, January 26, 2013

Foreshadowing



The first time I wrote a novel I wandered around for seventeen chapters, having no idea where I was going, before I fizzled and gave in to writers’ block for six months. I finally had to take the book all the way back to chapter four and rewrite it all.

Even so, that book never worked. There was no pay-off. The ending fell flat.


Why? Because I didn’t know the end from the beginning, so I couldn’t foreshadow the end. I couldn’t build reader anticipation. I couldn’t hint early on that there was only one way to solve the character’s dilemma.

This is not to say that seat-of-the-pantsers can’t write books with stellar endings that wrap things up in a satisfying way. They can. As long as they go back to their beginnings and do a lot of revising to add in the foreshadowing.

This is a necessary step.


And yet, so many writers seem to want to skip this.


When you skip the foreshadowing, it shows in the big things—the surprise ending works as well as pudding coming from the kitchen faucet. Sure it’s funny and unexpected, but it doesn’t really work. You turned the faucet on because you wanted water, not pudding. For an ending to work, a surprise ending or any other kind of ending, the reader has to be properly prepared. He has to say, “Of course. Why didn’t I see that? It was there all along. This is exactly the way the story went and this is exactly where it was supposed to end up.”

Leaving out the foreshadowing shows in smaller ways, too. Little actions that characters take that we don’t expect,  jar us. So do things about the world that surprise us—they have a purple sun? I’m halfway through the book and I’m just now learning this?


You can’t introduce a completely new element into the middle of book. Let’s say you’ve decided that the main character needs a ladder so he can climb into a window. He’s outside a warehouse in the middle of the night. If he’s never been to that warehouse before, you might let him stumble upon the ladder left behind by the painter. But if he was casing the warehouse out that morning and you didn’t have painters there with ladders, you cannot have the ladder there later that night and have the character think, “Oh yeah. One of the painters I saw here earlier left a ladder behind.”


This kind of thing never works. The reader says, “Huh? What painters? I didn’t see any painters.”


Even if your character has never been to the warehouse before, we’ll believe a painter left behind a ladder much more readily if several chapters earlier, you established that a certain painting company had an employee who often left tools behind at sites.


This is what you want to do for your reader: You want to make him believe the story you’re telling is true. It really happened. You’re not just making it up as you go along.


But what if your fly by the seat of your pants? What if you are just making it up as you go along? Now you need a ladder so you decide that earlier in the day painters left a ladder there. Now you need a dog bite so you mention that the character has a dog, even though we’ve didn’t see the dog the last eight times we were in the house. Now you need an evil doctor so suddenly the character becomes clumsy and breaks a leg.

That’s fine as long as you go back later and add in the foreshadowing. Put the painters in well before you need the ladder, show the dog the first time we enter the apartment, and have the character trip five times before he finally breaks his leg. .

Books that are made up of a series of convenient coincidences aren’t satisfying. They feel false. We can’t get into the dream. We can’t get lost in the story world and feel like we’re visiting a real place and reading about real people.


So whether you’re a plotter and planner or a seat-of-the-pantser, take the time to foreshadow. Your readers will thank you.

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Sally Apokedak
Sally Apokedak is an associate agent with the Leslie H. Stobbe Literary Agency. She's in the process of building a dynamite list of authors. She is also active in the Society of Children's Book Writers and Illustrators.


6 comments :

  1. And that's why I'm a somewhat plotter. I'm not a full plotter who knows every step, but I do know the major ones. I have to or I get bogged down and stalled out. I love foreshadowing. It's fun to see my CPs use it, too. If I know their basic story from the synopsis, I can see where they're putting it in. That's fun and it's a good learning exercise to spot it in theirs. I don't always spot it in a novel I'm reading for pleasure. :)

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  2. Hi Sally!
    This was excellent advice. I remember my high school English Literature teacher yelling "FORE-shadowing!!" until we were in hysterics. I'd have given that man a kidney. Tough, but brilliant.Not my kidney, but him...
    Anyhoo...several times in the MS, I slid in my heroine's great distaste for and revulsion at the mention of Indians. Who does she fall for? Yup. Who is the only one who truly understands her? Yup.
    I've always enjoyed dropping little morsels in the story that come back and wow the reader. It's all part of the ride.

    Thanks for this.
    On a personal note, my FB got hacked BAD, so I moved and have started over.

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  3. Thanks for commenting you two.

    I figure if God spent so much time foreshadowing Christ in the OT, we can spend little time foreshadowing important events in our novels.

    Rights?

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  4. Love this post - thanks! Foreshadowing is one of those subtle yet hard to grasp elements that separates a good book from a great book. And not only satisfying for reader when it emerges and "works", but for writer too. Thanks for sharing!

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  5. I am somehwere between a pantser and a plotter but in my current manuscript still don't have the ending - except the romance Happy Ever After ending.

    Thank you so much for this, Sally. I have foreshadowed possible conflicts in the developement of their relationship but now...that ending? Hmm. More plotting IS needed.

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  6. Wonderful advice. I've noticed some writers who forget to foreshadow something will slap in someone's POV to give us the information instead of going back and doing it right. Then we never have that person's POV ever again. It drives me crazier than I already am.

    Thanks again.

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