Novel Rocket: Deanne Gist's Musical Tribute - Show Vs. Tell

Friday, June 21, 2013

Deanne Gist's Musical Tribute - Show Vs. Tell


Words, Words, Words. I’m So Sick of Words!
by Bestselling Author Deeanne Gist

Remember that song from My Fair Lady?

Words! Words! Words! I’m so sick of words!
I hear words all day through;
First from him, now from you!
Is that all you blighters can do?

Don’t talk of stars burning above;
If you’re in love, Show me!”

That’s the song I force myself to focus on when I’m writing. Because, honestly, if I had my druthers, I’d rather tell. It’s so much easier.

“Tell me no dreams filled with desire.
If you’re on fire, Show me!”

But when I try to “show” the reader, what’s my first instinct? To rely on clich├ęs.

“Here we are together in the middle of the night!
Don’t talk of spring! Just hold me tight!
Anyone who has ever been in love’ll tell you that
This is no time for a chat!”

And, sadly, our readers are no different than Eliza Doolittle in this respect. They don’t want to read a story, they want to experience it. And the best way to accomplish this is by evoking emotion.

I know. Easier said than done. Still, we writers have a toolbox. And if we forage around in it, we’ll find a very powerful tool. It is the one Eliza is so adamant about: Let’s see some action!

A great example of this can be found in Jane Yolen’s, Sleeping Ugly. It’s a children’s book about a princess who is pretty on the outside and ugly on the inside. Watch how Yolen uses a show-don’t-tell technique to convey the princess’s inner qualities.

TELLING: Princess Miserella was mean.
SHOWING: Princess Miserella liked stepping on dogs. She kicked kittens. She threw pies in the cook’s face. And she never—not even once—said thank you or please.

Don’t you just love that? Showing is so much more powerful because it causes feelings within us to bubble up. That is our character’s single most important function: To cause the reader to feel.

When I read about a princess who steps on dogs and kicks kittens, it calls up feelings of hostility and outrage. It is so unheroic that I take an immediate dislike to her.

Now, let’s have a look at Plain Jane (who is plain on the outside, but pretty on the inside). In this scene, Jane has earned three wishes from the fairy godmother and Princess Miserella is none too happy about it:

“The princess stamped her foot.

‘Do that again,’ said the fairy, taking a pine wand from her pocket, ‘and I’ll turn your foot to stone.’

Miserella stamped her foot again. It turned to stone.

Plain Jane sighed. ‘My first wish is that you change her foot back.’”

After reading this, my heart immediately went awwwww. I like this girl. I like her a lot and I’m going to root for her the entire rest of the book.

I hesitate to break this down even further, but the truth is, we’re trying to get our readers to judge our characters. I know. Not exactly a friendly mission, but there it is. And neither you nor I can restrain ourselves. When we read a passage presented in the right way, we pronounce judgment on that character and, if the author is very skillful, the passage will draw a physical response from us. The whole reason we laugh, cry, tense up, swoon, bite our nails, or feel our pulse began to race is because the author has engaged us. The author has wielded her show-don’t-tell tool and evoked our emotions.

Like all rules, there needs to be a balance. If we attempt to maintain a high level of emotion all the way through the book, the reader will be too exhausted to enjoy it. So, balance the peaks with some quiet valleys. But even in a restful state, we have feelings.

“Don’t wait until wrinkles and lines
Pop out all over my brow,
Shooooooooow me now!”

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 Deeanne Gist—known to her family, friends, and fans as Dee—has rocketed up the bestseller lists and captivated readers everywhere with her original historical and contemporary romances. A favorite among readers and reviewers alike, her popular titles include A Bride Most Begrudging, A Bride in the Bargain, and Maid to Match. Her latest book, It Happened at the Fair (releasing April 2013), is her ninth published novel.
A popular speaker, Gist’s presentations have been featured on the front page of the Wall Street Journal and in other publications. The Wall Street Journal’s accompanying online video was the most watched video on the FrontPageWSJ.com website for several days following their feature.
Gist has a background in education and journalism. Her credits include People, Parents, Parenting, Family Fun, Houston Chronicle and Orlando Sentinel. She is also the creator of I Did It!®, a parenting line of products. Gist lives in Houston, Texas with her husband of thirty years. The couple has four grown children. 

14 comments :

  1. Cant wait to read this one!

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  2. What a perfect way to show the difference between showing and telling! I've always loved this song but never related it to writing. You and your books totally rock! Can't wait to read this latest one.

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  3. Loved the post! I loved how you used Eliza Doolittle... :) But I loved how you showed us how authors show us the feelings you have to evoke by writing! I so want to read your newest book, though!!!

    biancarachele@gmail.com

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  4. Love this post! What wonderful examples.
    (Now I keep wondering what Show NOT Tell would be like in preschool....haha!)

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    1. LOL! That was my FAVORITE day of the week in Kindergarten!

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  5. So excited to read this book. You are one of the best at making a book an experience.

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  6. I really enjoy reading all of Deanne's books because her characters are so engaging! I can't wait to read this one next!

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  7. Great post. Keep them coming.

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  8. Thank you for giving us concrete examples, for "showing" me how to show rather than tell! And thanks for the giveaway--I'd love to read a copy of this novel! danandlyndaedwards (at) msn (dot) com.

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  9. Looking forward to reading her latest book!

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  10. Enjoyed your blog & would love to read your book!
    Thanks for the giveaway opportunity!

    bonnieroof60@yahoo.com

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  11. You hooked me at the musical title and just kept reeling me in- my hubby is a theatre prof, our daughter is a professional actor getting her grad degree in theatre, and I am an actor/musician. I write for a nonprofit organization where we are constantly reminded to show, not tell. Thanks for the powerful reminder. Would so love to win the giveaway.
    dsks(at)gmail(dot)com

    Thanks and happy writing!

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    1. What a FUN family! Can I hang out with ya'll? :)

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  12. Cathy Sanders1:59 PM

    I love this! I have a writer friend who inspired me for the book I am writing now (aside from you of course, Deeanne) and she helps me to keep the five senses in mind when writing so I write in a way that lets the reader see, feel, hear, taste and touch what is happening in the book. You seem to have this ability down pat and I am still working on it. LOVE your books and can't wait to read the new one!

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