Her mother, her grandparents, Luke the diner owner, everyone in Whisper Hollow sang her praises.
Yet, she shows compassion toward the servants. A pro.
t want to see her living her life. For example, what’s her flaw that she has to struggle through that makes me cheer for her? To like her all the more?
So how do you avoid this syndrome?
- Give your heroine real conflict. Use scenes and dialog to show her internal desires and character. Set the stage. Don't tell me she's a great humanitarian, show me.
- Show real emotions. Give your protagonist a real dilemma that even her charm, beauty and talent cannot overcome.
- Create a character who believes in her while no one else does. In fact, her parents are disappointed. Her boss has given up on her. And her best friend betrayed her. Yet, the boy next door still remembers how she tok soup to old Mrs. Smith every morning when everyone else was at the community pool. That's showing us her greatness.
- Challenge your protagonist with a really external conflict that contrasts her internal desires and fears. Set it on the stage and show the reader her struggle. And her victory.
- Give secondary characters a shot at happiness. Perhaps they succeed where the protagonist failed. Feels more real that way.
Her novel, Once Upon A Prince, was a 2014 Christy Award Finalist.